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Band 3

some holiday should be used only for relaxation, but some other believes that it is best to learn something new.

There are different beliefs about how the holiday should be
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for
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.
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 one side is sure that
holidays
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 should be the
time
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 where people can relax
as well as
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 take a break from work, another party believes that learning new skills and experiences are the best option for
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 list' in
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 period. The first side argues that
holidays
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 are the only
time
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 for people to take a break. Other than
holidays
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, they are not able to take a break calmly because they have to focus on their work and affairs.
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,
this
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 party prefers their
holidays
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 to be used for gathering with family, quality
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, and even
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 as much as they need.
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, another party holds the belief that there is no reason to stop being productive, even in the
holidays
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. In their opinion,
holidays
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 are the best
time
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 for people to learn new skills they are interested in
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 the same case applies to essential experiences.
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 causes there are numerous
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educational institutions
provide
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that provide
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 chances for those who intend to gain essential knowledge during the
holidays
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. I would like to argue that introducing new skills and gaining experiences are the best options I have if
holidays
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 are coming up.
This
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 is exactly what I did on my
last
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holidays
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, when I
can
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 focus on olympiad preparation
and
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this
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 benefits me in the long term,
there
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 is no
suitable
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time
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 for me to do it
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 in
this
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 period.

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planning
Make your point clear at the start of the essay and stick to one main idea for each paragraph.
grammar
Use simple, short sentences. Check grammar and avoid long, unclear lines.
structure
Add a short ending that repeats your view and the why behind it.
examples
Give one or two clear examples that show your idea in real life.
content
The essay shows both sides of the view.
structure
There are linking words that show contrasts.
Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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