Development in tourism offer very little direct benefit for residents who live in these areas. To what extent do you agree?

In recent years, the advancement in

tourism

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offering

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has offered

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slight

agvantages

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advantages

for local communities directly. In

this

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essay, I will discuss both

benefits

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the benefits

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and drawbacks of

this

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issue, and explain why I believe that it has a negative effect

for

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residents. On the one hand, the development in

tourism

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has increased sharply, and it has numerous benefits.

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, more and more

visitor

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visitors

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can

brings

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bring

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job

oppoturnities

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opportunities

for local residents.

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is because the shops and restaurants

become

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are

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busier than before.

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, the

advanced

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advancement

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tourism

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also

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boost

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boosts

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the economy

for

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this

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area.

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, the crowded tourists

also

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brings

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bring

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negative

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a negative

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effect for residents.

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the

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apply

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littering and

environment

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environmental

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pollution

become

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have become

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a major problem among local communities.

This

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is because tourists only focus on the side of entertainment, but ignore the potential negative

effect

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effects

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Moreover

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, their waste of food and use of single-use containers are significantly

increase

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increased

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. It brings

the

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apply

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significiant

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significant

harm to

this

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area. In conclusion, it can

saw

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be seen

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both benefits and drawbacks

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the issue of the development in

tourism

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. And I believe that the

disvantages

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disadvantages

of over-

tourism

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are

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apply

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outweigh the advantages.

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Jan 15, 2026

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task response

Your answer is on the topic and you give your view. But the reasons you give are not strong enough. Add more clear points and explain why the benefits are small and the problems matter to residents.

structure

Plan your essay in clear steps. Use a short intro, two body parts (one for a good point and one for a bad point), then a simple conclusion that repeats your view.

content

Give a few precise examples of how tourism can hurt locals, like noise, crowd, price rise, or less space. Keep examples short and easy.

coherence

Use linking words to connect ideas well. Words like first, also, but, however, therefore help a lot.

grammar

Check spelling and grammar to avoid errors like 'opportunties' and 'significiant'. Simple spelling and correct word forms help a lot.

position

You show a clear view from the start.

organization

You use a normal essay shape with introduction, body, and conclusion.

content

You mention both sides, showing balance in idea.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

186 words

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