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The line graph below shows the household recycling rates in three different countries between 2005 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The
line
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graph
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 illustrates
regional
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the regional
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 household recycling rate from 2005 to 2015 in three different
country
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countries
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;
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:
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UK
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the UK
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,
France
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, and
Germany
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.
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Overall
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Overall,
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 the recycling rates of
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UK
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the UK
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 and
Germany
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 showed
increase
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increasing
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 percentages in each
year
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,
while
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France
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 had a significantly decreased
number
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 for several years. In
2005
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2005,
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Germany
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 and
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UK
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the UK
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 were nearly 20% and 35% and gradually increased,
while
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UK
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the UK
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 is
the
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in the
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 second position, and
Germany
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 among the
last
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 position in the first
year
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 of the
line
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graph
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.
Although
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France
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 had the first rank
number
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,
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moreover
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moreover,
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 from 2005 to 2013 the
line
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graph
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sowed
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showed
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France
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 steadily had a
decreased
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decreasing
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number
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. In the same
year
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, 2009,
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UK
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the UK
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 and
Germany
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 had a significant
increased
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number
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 up to 10 percentages.
At the end
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 of the
line
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graph
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showed
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apply
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,
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UK
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the UK
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 and
Germany
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 had nearly percentage between 55% and 60%.
Nevertheless
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,
at the end
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 of the
year
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 in 2013,
France
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finally
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 had increased recycling rates
,
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;
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however
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however,
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France
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still
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was still
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on
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in
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the
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apply
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last
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 position among these three
country
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countries
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "at the end, last, while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words line, graph, uk, france, germany, year, number with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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