studying art in school improves students' performance in othr subjects,because it is easier for multi-skilled students to learn new things.That's why art should be obligatory in schools. Do you agree or disagree?

The subject art requires creativity, excellent motor skills, and critical thinking so as to present personal reflection. When painting, sketching, or doodling, students can express their deepest thoughts and ideas regardless of restrictions from writing or

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criticism

from others.

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Linking Words

, all in all, studying art is good for students in

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ventilation

, stress reduction, and

help

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boost

self identity

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weakness

State clearly if you think art should be required in schools or not. Your view in the essay is not clear.

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Plan your idea. Say your view, then give 2 main points and a short example for each.

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Link ideas with small, common words and put 2 or 3 ideas in 2 or 3 short paragraphs.

strength

The idea that art helps mind and feel is clear.

strength

There is a closing line that shows end of idea.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Grammar mistakes
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 6.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

1 paragraphs

58 words

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