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As we are facing more and more problems,which affect the whole planet,good relationship between different countries are becoming more important than ever before .To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In recent decades, there
are
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 overwhelming trends in environmental
issues
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 like global warming, more frequent
typoons
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typhoons
, and
higher
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a higher
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 likelihood of extreme
weathers
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weather
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. These
enviomental
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environmental
issues
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 are closely bonded to human beings and serve as an urgent task to be solved in a global
matter
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. The
planet
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 we, the human beings, live on is being jeopardised by modernisation and techniques ike deforestation to promise us and the younger generations
with
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a better living. Now, the
conseuqences
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consequences
to
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of
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 our previous acts are hitting us back, affecting us, threatening our
countries
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, our home and our families.
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 outcomes are caused by
everone
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everyone
 on the
planet
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, regardless of distance,
genders
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 and nationality.
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, these environmental
issues
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 have to be solved together, hand in hand, as a whole around the globe. Leaders of the different
countries
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 should tackle
with
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the
issues
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 side by side to protect
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this
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planet
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 we all live on.
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 of hurting one another or starting wars, they should cooperate to build a better and
safe
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safer
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planet
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 for
theri
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their
 citizens and the future generations. Looking back to the recent, ongoing events, many
countries
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 are fighting against each other,
on
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over
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 properties or lands. Russia and Ukraine have been
fighitng
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fighting
 for over
an
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a
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 year and still ongoing, thinking of some new weapons that can
used
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 against their enemy. For them, they are not trying to solve environmental
issues
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 that are urgent and closely tied to the civilisation, but escalating them with
those
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nuclear weapons. They are creating more and more greenhouse gases, which worsen the
environement
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environment
 and
causing
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 direct deaths of their own citizens
instead
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 of uniting with the other
countries
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 to work on the solutions to the environmental problems. Why
cant
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can't
 they simply abandon their pride or consistency, stop their wars and work on how to solve the environmental
issues
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? Now, the world
stopped
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in
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tackling the issue, busy starting more and more fights. More and more
countries
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 are having intense relationships with one another,
then
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 how can the country leaders focus on
the
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environmental tasks when they are busy
in
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defending themselves and attacking
the
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others?
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, fostering good relationships between the
countries
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serve
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serves
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 as the key to unity and
the
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cooperation in solving
the
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evironemtnal
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environmental
issues
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.

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task
State your clear view at the start and keep it through the essay.
coherence
Use clear links between ideas. Use words like first, also, however, in addition, finally.
language
Check spelling and form: typos like enviroment, fighitng, and other common words.
structure
Have a clear intro, 2-3 body paragraphs, and a short conclusion.
examples
Add more real examples or facts to back your claim.
idea
Clear idea that countries must work together to fix global issues.
example
Use a real world example (Russia-Ukraine) to show why peace helps the env.
conclusion
Ends with a call to act and to build a better plan.
Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
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