The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line chart illustrates data about the percentage of the population in
Philippines
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the Philippines
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, Malaysia, Thailand and
Indonesia
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living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with
predictoins
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predictions
for 2030 and 2040.
Overall
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, the percentage of people who live in all
those
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apply
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four countries has increased over the years.
However
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, Malaysia is the first with a significant growth
while
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Indonesia
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is the
last
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with
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a gradul
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gradul
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gradual
peak.
Malaysia
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Malaysia's
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population rose slightly between 1970-
1990
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1990,
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with over 40%
then
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there was a sharp growth with above 80% in 2040.
Meanwhile
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Meanwhile,
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people who live in
Philippines
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the Philippines
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has
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have
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dropped a little
in
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from
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1990 to 2010
but
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, but
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then
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it
gose
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goes
up
modestlly
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modestly
.
In contrast
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, people in Thailand and
Indonesia
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have been increasing since 1970 to just over
a
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apply
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10% and it continues to grow till 2040,
specilly
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especially
the one
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those
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who live in the
citie
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city
of
Indonesia
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in 2000
has
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have
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witnessed a steep surge with just under
70 percentage
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70%
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in 2040.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Vocabulary: Replace the words indonesia with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • graph
  • percentage
  • population
  • cities
  • Asian countries
  • 1970
  • 2020
  • predictions
  • 2030
  • 2040
  • estimations
  • urban
  • increasing
  • steadily
  • Japan
  • China
  • rise
  • urbanization
  • South Korea
  • India
  • upward trend
  • slow pace
  • surpass
  • resided
  • projected
  • moderate increase
  • significant surge
  • exceed
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