The graph shows the proportions of three nutrients in three different diets. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

the
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The
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bie
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pie
chart shows three types of different
lifestyle
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lifestyles
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of eating, starting with an average
diet
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leading
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, leading
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to
healthy
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a healthy
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normal
diet
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to strict
diet
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for sports. To
began
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begin
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with, carbs
has
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have
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the highest percentage of each pie,
it
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which
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shows how crucial
carb
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carbs
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is
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are
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.
healthy
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A healthy
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diet
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and
the
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a
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strict healthy
diet
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are having
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have
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the same amount of carbs. since they are following the healthy style but with different pressure, meanwhile an average
diet
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is having
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has
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less than
them
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they
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carbs
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do carbs
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with
10
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a 10
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%
presentage
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percentage
decrease.
Furthermore
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, the normal and healthy diest is having the same number of fat for each platte, unlike strict
diet
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is 5% less than them, watch is clearly logical since the strict
diet
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is foucsing on limiting the fats as much as they could,
on the other hand
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, with the most important part of the platte is protien, the chart are showing, the average eater person take the most amount of protien going to the secound highest persentage is the healthy one, and ending with thee lowest one is the healthy strict
diet
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.
To sum up
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, people would assume the healthy
diet
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would be
relvent
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relevant
more for the healthy
diet
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for sports, but it wasn't in
this
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case, the
bie
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pie
chart
show
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shows
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us that the average eater is much more likely to be closer to the healthy
diet
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lifestyle.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Vocabulary: Replace the words diet with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportion
  • nutrient
  • distribution
  • trend
  • pattern
  • significant
  • anomaly
  • comparison
  • diet
  • highest
  • lowest
  • surprising
  • similarity
  • variation
  • health implications
  • data representation
  • evident
  • notable
  • remarkable
  • contrast
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