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There is a good deal of evidence that increasing car use is contributing to global warming and having other undesirable affects on people’s health and well-being. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

There is a
significat
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significant
 amount of proof that overuse of vehicles has a negative impact on climate change, and the
overall
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 public health. I strongly agree with
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 opinion because the CO2 emissions are increasing the temperatures rapidly, affecting not only the
enviroment
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environment
 but
also
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peoples
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people's
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 well-being. The excess use of motor cars leads to the growing amount of fuel emissions
which
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, which
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 are not only
poluting
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polluting
 the air, but are
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demaging
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damaging
 the ozone layer.
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 is a natural protector from direct sunlight, and
as a
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result
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result,
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 the
overall
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 temperatures are
rasing
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rising
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 rapidly. A good example of
this
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are
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is
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 the increasing number of heatwaves that different regions
are
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have
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experiencing
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experienced
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 in
past
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recent
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 years.
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, CO2 has a more
imediat
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immediate
 impact on the air, which can easily be observed in urban areas. As
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, in big
cities
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cities,
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 the air quality is poorer
due to
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 the
disproportional
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disproportionate
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 number of cars in them. Overuse of personal vehicles can
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 negatively affect
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an individuals
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individuals
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individual's
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 health
as a result
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 of less movement. Nowadays, people will choose to take their car or a taxi
while
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 going to work, school or to the store.
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 indeed is more
confortable
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comfortable
,
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however
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however,
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 the lack of
exercies
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exercise
 is detrimental to the human body and mental health. To
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 extent, I would argue that a walk after work can be a good form of physical activity, and help clear the mind much more than the stress of
trafic
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traffic
. In conclusion, I hold the view that carbon
polution
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pollution
 generated by the overuse of cars is one of the main reasons for the negative evolution of climate change and
overall
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 declining public well-being.

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task
State your view clearly in the first sentence and add one strong idea per paragraph with a short link to the next idea.
structure
Use a clear plan: intro, 2 body parts, and a short end. Each paragraph has one main idea.
language
Check words in use. Fix spelling mistakes and use plain words.
strength
You show a clear view from the start and keep it to the end.
strength
You give points on both air and health.
strength
You offer examples to back up your view.
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