the increase in the production of consumer goods results in damage to the natural environment. What are the causes of this? What can be done to solve this problem?

The production of
consumer
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products
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around the world has been increasing more rapidly in recent
years
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than ever before.
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, the waste from
consumer
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goods pollutes our natural environment
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hence
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, immediate actions need to be taken to solve
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issue.
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with, the world’s population has increased dramatically in the
last
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few
years
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, which has led to an increase in the demand for various
products
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to meet their daily living needs. In developing countries
such
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as Indonesia,
deforestation
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has
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prevalent, with trees being cut down for farmland and to exploit wood used to produce furniture and materials to construct homes.
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, the massive loss of trees has resulted in natural disasters,
for example
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, floods and landslides, because the root function to retain a massive amount of water in the ground no longer exists.
At the end
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of 2024, severe floods occurred in Sumatra Island
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intense
deforestation
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during the
last
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30
years
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, which caused loss of lives and livelihoods for the residents.
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, the high demand for
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consumer
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for daily consumption is triggered by consumerism. Every single day, we use
products
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made from plastics, and
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this
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is
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non-degradable substances for hundreds of
years
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. The best viable solution to tackle
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problem is by educating societies about the dangers of
deforestation
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, because by doing so, their awareness will be raised, and
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step is expected to reduce the number of trees lost.
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, governments should encourage citizens to reduce the usage of plastic
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and promote recycled materials in their daily lives.
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, in department stores around Indonesia, they no longer provide plastic bags to carry
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they purchase, but paper bags, which are considered degradable and do not pollute the environment. In conclusion, I contend that rapid population growth and consumerism have led to a high demand for
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goods. But I believe that governments have a crucial role
to educate
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societies regarding the danger of
deforestation
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and
encourage
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them to use recycled materials in their daily lives.

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task response
Task response: You answer the task. You give why the issue happens and how it can be fixed. To be better, state your main idea in the first part and finish with a clear last line that shows your view.
coherence
Coherence: Your ideas are in a good order. Use simple linking words like 'and', 'but', 'also' to join ideas. Some sentences are long; split them.
coherence
Coherence: Have a clear section for causes and a clear section for fixes. Try to keep one idea per sentence and use pronouns to connect ideas.
structure
Intro and conclusion are clear.
content
You give a real example (Sumatra flood).
Your opinion

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • production
  • consumer goods
  • natural environment
  • damage
  • causes
  • overconsumption
  • demand
  • environmental regulations
  • enforcement
  • natural resources
  • industrial pollution
  • waste
  • inadequate
  • waste management practices
  • public awareness
  • education
  • sustainable alternatives
  • stricter environmental laws
  • recycling
  • responsible consumption
  • clean technologies
  • renewable energy
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