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Writing Samples
Band 3

Undergraduate students majoring in Business or in the Sciences should not be required to take any courses in the Humanities since those courses won’t benefit their future careers. Write a response to the prompt in which you discuss whether or not you agree or disagree. Be certain to fully develop your position and carefully consider ways in which your position could be challenged.

It is thought that university
students
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, especially undergraduate learners, should not be required to participate in the humanities
courses
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 because
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they
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doesn't
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don't
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 support their careers in some ways in the long term. I strongly agree with
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 suggestion and will explain the reasons behind
this
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 statement.
Firstly
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, what makes the
courses
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 related to the Humanities should not be required
to
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 individuals majoring
Business
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in Business
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 is that it could
make
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cause
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 them
getting
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to get
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 stressed. With many
courses
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 available in universities nowadays,
students
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 sometimes need to be more focused and
is
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 struggling with it. Additional
courses
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 will divide their concentration so that they cannot perform well in their class.
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 will lead to
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 consequences, including bad future careers.
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,
students
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 in universities nowadays are very busy because
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 of the
courses
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 require extra
time
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 to be learnt. It will make
students
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 have small
time
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 to review their lessons and even
little
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time
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 to improve their additional soft skills studied in the class. More
courses
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 outside their main
courses
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 will spend their free
time
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 that has to be used to improve their cognitive abilities,
for example
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involving
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by participating
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 in
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an organization
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organization
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 to train their social skills. In conclusion, I think that
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 more
in
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 one field is more important
rather
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than several fields
togetherly
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 because it will divide their focus and their
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 will be spent on more activities.
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 why
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in
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 one field is crucial than learn all the things without urgency.

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task response
Be clear on your view. A good essay says what you think and adds why and what can go against it.
structure
Plan your work. Start with a short intro and a simple main plan for each para. End with a short finish.
coherence
Use simple link words to show the order. Use 'first', 'also', 'but', 'then', 'in addition', and 'overall' to tie ideas.
cohesion
Give one or two real ideas or facts to back up your views. Use examples that fit the topic.
grammar
Check your grammar. Pay attention to word form and subject verb rules so you can be clear.
content
Your view is clear and you give two reasons.
structure
There is an intro and a conclusion.
focus
The essay stays on one main topic for the most part.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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