IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 6

The charts below show information about water consumption in Australia in 2004 and how residential water was consumed in the same year.

The chart gives information
data
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on the drinking of
water
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 in Australia in 2004 and household
water
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 consumption in the same year.
Overall
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, the usage of residential
drink
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drinks
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 in the bathroom and the garden was the same,
while
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 the drinking of
drink
Fix the agreement mistake
drinks
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 was less in the kitchen.
While
Linking Words
,
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 the figure for the bathroom rose to 27 % that for the kitchen decreased to 10 % the terms of drink. The amount of
water
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 expenditure for washing clothes was 20 %. The usage of
water
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 for the garden was 27 % which was the same percentage
with
Change preposition
as
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 the bathroom.
when
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When
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 it comes to the toilet, it
was
Verb problem
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consumed 15 %
water
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words water with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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