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The maps below show the layout of Grange Park in 1920 and how it looks today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The maps demonstrate changes that
occured
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occurred
 in the Grange
Park
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 in 1920 and how it
changed
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has changed
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 till today.
Overall
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, the
park
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 experienced a lot of changes, except
the
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for the
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 Rose
garden
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 at the top of the left
side
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. Most
seats
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 were removed. There were two entrances which
head
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led
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 to Arnold Avenue and Eldon
street
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Street
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.  In 1920, at the top and bottom of the left
side
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were
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was
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Rose
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the Rose
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garden
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Garden
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.
From
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On
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the
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apply
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both
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side
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sides
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 of the
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garden
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garden,
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 there were
located
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apply
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seats
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. Between
Rose
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the Rose
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 gardens
were
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was
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 located stage for
musicans
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musicians
. To the present
days
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day
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, only left Rose
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garden
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Garden
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at
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is left at
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 the top.
Stage
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The stage
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 was changed
by
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to
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amphitheatre
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an amphitheatre
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 for concerts. All
seats
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 were removed.  In 1920, in the middle of
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the park
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park
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park,
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 there were
fountain
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fountains
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 and entrances. By
today
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today,
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 the
fountain
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fountains
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 were replaced by
Rose
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the Rose
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garden
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Garden
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 that surrounded
from
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on
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 each
side
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with
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by
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seats
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. At the right
side
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 of the bottom were located
pond
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ponds
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 for water plants and near
Rose
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the Rose
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garden
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. At the bottom was
glasshouse
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a glasshouse
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 with
seats
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. Today, the pond
changed&nbsp
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changed
;
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apply
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 to
children's
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a children's
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 play area and
garden
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 to
cafe
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a cafe
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. The glasshouse
replaced
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was replaced
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to
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with
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water
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a water
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 feature
and
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, and
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near
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a newly
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 built
entrance
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apply
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underground car
park
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. 

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words park, garden, side, seats with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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