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n the past, lectures were used as a way of teaching large numbers of students, but now with the development of technology for education, many people think there is no justification for attending lectures. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

There is no doubt that in today's changing world, the issue of technology for education has become an important topic
many
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people
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 discuss.Opinions on
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 matter are clearly divided.Some
people
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 believe that it brings many benefits and should be supported.In
this
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 essay,I will discuss both sides of the argument before sharing my own opinion. One group of
people
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 believes that technology for education brings a number of benefits. They argue that it allows
people
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 to improve their
knowledges
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knowledge
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.
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,many individuals have found
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 change
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to be a
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saving
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apply
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time
, increasing
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saver, increasing
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 efficiency and gaining better access to resources.As
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results
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result
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,supporters of
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 view see it as a progressive and beneficial trend.
On the other hand
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, others hold a different opinion and argue that the situation has several causes
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and negative
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 consequences.
This
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 side believes that the risks and disadvantages outweigh the potential benefits.

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task
Say your own view clearly in the end and give a reason.
structure
Finish with a short closing that restates your view.
content
Add one or two real examples to back up your ideas.
coherence
Use plain link words like and, but, so to join ideas.
content
The topic is set in the intro.
structure
Both sides are shown in the text.
style
Some sentences are clear and easy to read.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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