The graph shows the transport modes in European city between 1960 and 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The information about the way
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tourist
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use
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for travel around the
european
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European
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city between 1960 and 2000 with various
kind
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kinds
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of
transportation
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such
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bus
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,
car
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bike
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, and foot displayed in the graph. As the graph shows, in 1960 the individuals
prefer
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to travel around the city
by
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foot.
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,
people
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in 1980 favor to
use
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bus
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a bus
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to
have
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make
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a journey.
However
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, in
2000
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2000,
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traveler
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prefer
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preferred
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to take a
car
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for their
trasnportation
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transportation
for
traveling
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travelling
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around the city. In 1960,
people
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more
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were more
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like
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to travel
with
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their
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foot as 30
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percent
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per cent
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of tourist
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tourist
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tourists
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use
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this
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method to take a journey.
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, there are 25% of individuals who
use
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bike
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for their
transportation
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. As some
people
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like to
use
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a
bus
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as
the
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transportation
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, there are
morethan
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more than
15
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percent
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per cent
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people
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of people
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who
use
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that. Meanwhile, only 5
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percent
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per cent
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of
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tourists
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who
use
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a
car
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.
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, in
1980
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1980,
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travelers
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more prefer
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to take a
bus
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for their journey. Because
morethan
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more than
25
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percent
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per cent
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of travelers
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travelers
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travellers
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use
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this
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transportation
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Also
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there are
people
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who like to
use
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a
car
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for
traveling
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travelling
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. Since
,
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morethan
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more than
25
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percent
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per cent
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persons
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of people
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take a
car
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. Different from 20 years ago, only 25
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percent
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people
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who
use
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bike
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bikes
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and 20
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percent
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of
people
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in recent times who
use
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kinds
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various kinds
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of
transportation
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Finally
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,
In
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2000
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2000,
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like
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better
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to operate a
car
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than
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rather than
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ride a
bike
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35
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percent
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per cent
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of sightseer
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sightseer
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sightseers
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who operate
this
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transportation
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, and only below than 10
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percent
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per cent
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of tourist
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tourist
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tourists
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who ride a
bike
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.
More over
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, there are 15
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percent
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per cent
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of vacationer
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vacationer
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vacationers
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who take a
bus
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and below than 10
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percent
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per cent
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of visitor
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visitor
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visitors
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who walk for
traveling
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travelling
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..
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "on the other hand".
Introduction: The introduction is missing.
Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words tourist, use, transportation, bus, car, bike, people, percent with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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