People living in large cities today face many problems in their everyday life. What are these problems? Should governments encourage people to move to smaller regional towns? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Over the past few
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there has been increasing discussion about the relative importance of the problems in big towns and whether the government should make smaller
cities
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more attractive for
people
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from the largest ones. As a starting point, what springs to
minds
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is that the main problem in big
cities
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are
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the huge price for
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buy
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an
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house or even an
apartment
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as there is more demand than offers. My cousin had to pay
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triple
of
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the price that it
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in his small
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cities
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to live in Paris.
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the price of life in general is
high
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not just the accommodation
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also
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the food from
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the supermarket
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or when you
will
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go to have dinner in a restaurant. When I was
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a student
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in
Paris
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Paris,
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it was really hard to find budget
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supermarket because almost every market in the capital of France
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high prices . Turning to another aspect related to the governments,
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nevertheless
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small
cities
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are actually less attractive than bigger
.
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they
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need to develop the small
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to encourage
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for living
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to live
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their
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. It. In
France
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France,
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some politicians
decide
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to develop some small
cities
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to give a more richest
varieties
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in the country in
term
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of important
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. Today
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, despite
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that Paris is the biggest city in the country, there
is
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others which
becomed
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become
prominent and very famous
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Lille, Marseille,
Strasbourg
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and Strasbourg
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.
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Lille
become
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a very touristic city for
his
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unique architecture and
his
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cheese Maroille
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become
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very famous in France.And the
others
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cities
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have
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also
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their
owns
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particularities and specialities. These
development
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developments
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funded by the
french
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French
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government motivate some
people
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of
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from
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big
town
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towns
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to migrate
in
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to
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smaller ones.
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Overall
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there are some problems in huge
cities
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,
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however
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however,
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the governments have developed minor
cities
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to encourage
people
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to move to the latter.

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structure
Your plan is not clear. Start with one line on the main problems in big cities, then give your view on moves to smaller towns.
grammar
Use simple, correct grammar. Many errors hide your ideas and hurt meaning.
organization
Put ideas in a clear order. Use one idea per paragraph. First problems, then the idea of moving to small towns, then a short final thought.
examples
Give a real example for each point. It can be from your life or from news, but keep it short and simple.
content
The essay shows a clear view that cost of living is a problem in big cities.
examples
You name real places (Paris, Lille) which shows your idea about how towns can draw people.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general
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