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People can eat a wide variety of food that can be grown in other areas. As a result, people eat more food produced in other regions than that only locally made. Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

Nowadays, a wide range of
food
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 can be
avaliable
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available
 anywhere
that is
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been
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apply
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incorporated from other
region
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regions
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. As many people choose different
cusine
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cuisines
 rather than their own
recipies
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recipes
.
However
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, because of
it
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it,
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 some locally made
recipies
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recipes
 have not been
recognized
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recognised
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 for
its
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their
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 taste and
nuturients
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nutritional
benifits
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benefits
.
Due to
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this
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improvement
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improvement,
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i
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I
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 believe
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the disadvantage
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disadvantage
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disadvantages
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 outweigh the advantages and provide arguments to support.
Lets
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Let's
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 begin by looking at the advantages of imported
food
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, one of the main
positive
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positives
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 of it is knowing what other
cusines
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cuisines
tastes
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taste
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 and
process
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the process
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 of making
it
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them
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.
what i
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What I
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 mean by
this
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 is that every area has
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a
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different way of preparing and
varied
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a varied
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 style of
food
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.
For example
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,
although
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Butter
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the Butter
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 Chicken
recipie
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recipe
 is native to North India, it has been the national
food
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 of
United
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the United
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 Kingdom because citizens have liked the taste of it. In
this
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way
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way,
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 it can build a relation between other regions by sharing each
other
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other's
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cusines
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cuisines
 and supplements.
By eating
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Eating
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food
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 produced by other areas has its own disadvantageous
mainly
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, mainly
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 losing their own
recipies
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recipes
.

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task response
Say clearly if the good side or the bad side is more. Then give strong ideas for each side with real examples.
coherence
Use more linking words to show how ideas fit. Use words like first, next, and finally.
structure
Make a clear end. add a short final line to show your view.
language
Fix spell and grammar. Use simple and clear forms.
idea
Some idea on how food from one place is used in another.
example
Butter Chicken example shows a real link of food move.
attempt
The essay tries to compare pros and cons.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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