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Writing Samples
Band 2.5

Many believe that living in a city offers greater benefit compared to life in the countryside. To what extent to do you agree or disagree?

Some
people
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 think that living in an urban
city
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 is more
benefical
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beneficial
 in
constast
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contrast
 to life in the countryside. I strongly agree, because
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city
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the city
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 offers a
alot
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lot
 of utilities and
serviess
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services
 for
it
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its
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citizients
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citizens
 and a
soical
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social
live
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life
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 that
people
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 need. A
city
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 offers a lot of utilities that
people
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 need in
thier dayliy
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their daily
 lives. An
avregge
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average
city
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 has a hospital, malls , schools,
entertinmeant
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entertainment
, and
restrunets
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restaurants
.In
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 everything a person
need
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needs
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 to live a normal life.
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, A
city
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 can host a lot of
entertainmeant
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entertainment
 events
such
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,
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apply
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muisc conserts
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music concerts
, Football matches and other sports
compeitions
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competitions
. In case of medical
emergnsies
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emergencies
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people
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, people
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 have a great
amount
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number
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 of hospitals
the
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apply
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they can reach in a short distance
unlike
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, unlike
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 the
countrysids
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countryside
. The other
mjor
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major
 advantage is that a
city
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offer
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offers
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 a
soical
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social
 life that
people
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 need.
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, you can meet new
people
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 and make
friend
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friends
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 at the
supermarkte
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supermarket
, work, and in the street. It
also
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 helps
famliy
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families
 that live in the same
neiberhood
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neighbourhood
.
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, their kids can play with each
others
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other
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 and make their bond
stornger
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stronger
.
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, living in the countryside can be
benefical
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beneficial
. It is quiet and relaxing, it
also
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 helps you to
concect
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connect
 with the
enviroment
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environment
 more.
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to
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To
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 conclude, I believe living in the
city
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 is better than living in the countryside.

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language
Fix spelling and word form. Many words are wrong or misspelled. Use correct spelling and easy words.
structure
Make a clear intro and a conclusion. Start with your view and what you will talk about. End with a short wrap up.
structure
Divide into 3-4 clear paragraphs. Each paragraph has one main idea.
coherence
Use linking words to show how ideas are connected and to move from one point to another.
content
Give more detail for each point. Explain why city life has these points and back up with more examples or facts.
strength
The writer states a clear view and sticks with it.
strength
Some good examples are used, like hospitals and social life in the city.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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