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In many countries, men and women are working full time. It is therefore logical for women and men to share household tasks. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

It is often argued in different culture of countries that both of sex of people have
job
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jobs
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,
that
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which
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starts
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start
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 at 9
a.m
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a.m.
 and finish at 6
p.m
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p.m.
which
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, which
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that
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apply
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mean
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means
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 they
do
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apply
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work all possible working times.
However
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, it is natural for ladies and
men
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divide
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to divide
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 the
houseworks
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housework
 between themselves . As far as I am concerned, I
am
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apply
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totally agree
to
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with
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this
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 argument, and the reasons will be thoroughly explained as follows.
Firstly
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, it is really
significiant
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significant
 to have
time
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 for individuals to take
their
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apply
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time
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 for themselves.
Time
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 management
is
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plays
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crucial
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a crucial
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 role
for
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in
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people
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people's
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 lives to take rest and give them motivation to start over.
Therefore
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, each
people
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person
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 should spend their
times
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time
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for
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on
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 their essential needs.
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, if
women
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 do
cooking
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the cooking
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, and
men
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preparing
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prepare
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table
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the table
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 to have
incredible
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an incredible
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 dinner for
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last
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the last
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times
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time
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 before
finish
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finishing
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 the day , it will be
someting
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something
 valuable and
prize
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a prize
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 after work.
On the other hand
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, deep talking and
give
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giving
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 each
others
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other
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 some priorities
more
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are more
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 essential in
this
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 case. It is
truly
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true
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 that every
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men
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man
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 and
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women
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woman
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 can do anything by themselves, but if there is something deep
feels
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that feels
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 and respect for each
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other
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others
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others,
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 it will be more valuable. Showing vulnerability can strengthen relationships.
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 ,
men
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 cleaning and
women
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 cooking or
otherwise
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 , during
this
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time
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 they can talk about their
feeling
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feelings
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 about throught the day
and
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, and
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this
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 all
make
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makes
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 them stay alive, positive , and informed
each
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about each
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 other.
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This
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These
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 things
make
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apply
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also
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 make couples
connecting
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connect
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 deeper. In conclusion, in
varied
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various
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 countries ,
men
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 and
women
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 are working
full
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full-time
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time
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 and after all that
day
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day,
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 they have to divide households to stay alive and positive. I agreed that
this
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 is what
should
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apply
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both sides of sex
do
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should do
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 for
time
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 management and deep connections.

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task
State your clear view in the opening line and keep a straight path through the essay. Do not shift stance.
coherence
Use basic link words to show how each idea connects, like First, Also, But, For example.
organization
Make each paragraph have one main idea with a short example. This helps clarity.
language
Check grammar and word form. Use short, simple sentences.
content
Give one or two real but simple examples about home tasks or time to support your point.
content
The topic is clear and you take a view that men and women should share chores.
content
You mention practical ideas like time for rest and talking in the day.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • share
  • tasks
  • household
  • work
  • men
  • women
  • equal
  • happy
  • family
  • relationships
  • stress
  • teamwork
  • children
  • promote
  • fairness
  • responsibility
  • skills
  • life
  • hours
  • create
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