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Some ursity students want to learn about other subjects in addition to their main subjects.Others believe it is more importatnt to give all their time and attention to studying for a qualification. discuss both these views and give your opinion

Countless university students suggest to learn and
study
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studying
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 about other subjects
beside
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besides
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 their major subjects. But
also
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 some students believe it is crucial to spend all their time focus to awear about their qualifications. In my opinion,studying and focusing on your major might
gives
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give
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 you the ability to
raech
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reach
 high marks in
schools
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school
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structure
Plan your essay before you write. Start with a short line that states the view. Then write two or three clear parts for each view. End with a clear own answer.
language
Use small link words to show how ideas go together, like and, but, so, because.
content
Make your main points clear and stick to the topic. Give a simple reason or example for each point.
content
There is an attempt to talk about two sides of the topic.
language
Some ideas show you want to give your own view.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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