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Some people believe that governments should invest more money in public transportation rather than building new roads. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It is increasingly argued whether governments should spend more money
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 public
transportation
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 rather than constructing new roads.
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 essay agrees with the statement because
this
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 approach will significantly reduce
traffic
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 pressure and enhance better environmental
health
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.
To begin
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 with, one of the key reasons is that public
transportation
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 offers long-terms solutions for
traffic
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 issues.
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 is because by using buses and subways, a large
number
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 of
people
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 can be transported from one place to another. When the
transportation
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 facilities are well-developed, more
people
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 will come and utilise them, increasing the reduced
number
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 of
traffic
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 pressure
that is
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 happened because of cars and motorcycles.
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, a
various
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large
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number
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 of
people
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 will shift to public
transportation
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.
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 can be seen in countries
such
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 as Indonesia, where individuals prefer to
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 MRT and LRT
instead
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 of driving their car to their offices.
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 is particularly important in rapidly growing cities, where road expansion cannot keep pace with increasing population and vehicle ownership. Another major reason is that
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 approach will support
the
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environmental
health
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 to be cleaner.
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 road expansion may reduce the
traffic
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 problems,
but
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apply
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the gas emissions will increase
due to
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 the
number
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 of vehicles
are
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is
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 not falling.
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, by increasing the capacity of mass
transportation
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, the rate of gas emission will reduce
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as
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, as
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 well as
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number
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the number
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 of
people
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 using private cars for commuting.
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, the environmental
health
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 will be much better.
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, Japanese workers who
prefers
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prefer
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 to use trains to support better air quality.
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 matters because lower air pollution levels directly contribute to better public
health
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 outcomes in urban areas. In conclusion,
this
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 topic has been
discussed widely
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widely discussed
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 whether governments should invest more
on
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in
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 building roads or public
transportation
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.
Although
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 building roads may
support to
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help
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 ease
traffic
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 pressure,
this
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 essay believes that it is better to spend more money on public
transportation
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 because
this
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 investment is a long-term solution for
this
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 issue and
increase
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increases
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the
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apply
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environmental
health
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.

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task response
State your view in the first line. Add 2 to 3 clear reasons. Give at least one real example for each reason.
coherence
Link your ideas with small word, such as and, but, also, because. Start each paragraph with a topic idea and end with a line that links to the next paragraph.
grammar
Fix small errors in wording. For example, change 'a various number' to 'many', 'to using MRT' to 'using the MRT', 'gas emissions' is correct. Use simple form.
vocabulary
Use simple words. Do not use big or long words. Keep your phrases short.
structure
Divide the work in clear pipes: intro, body with two ideas, and a short conclusion. Each paragraph has one idea.
content
The writer shows a clear view and points.
content
There are examples from real places (Indonesia, Japan).
structure
Two main ideas two support the view; the plan is easy to follow.
Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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