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The chart below give information on the ages of the populations of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projection for 2050. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line chart indicates the Australian attendance in 5 different activities in
public
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center
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centre
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 in Melbourne from 2020 to 2025 and the projection by 2040.
Overall
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,
film
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the film
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 club had most of the participants,
whereas
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,
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apply
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people
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 joining in
table
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tennis
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 increased during the period
and
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, and
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the oppiosite
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oppiosite
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opposite
 was true for
amateur
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dramatics
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. It can be seen that musical performances
was
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were
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 held later;
however
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,
it
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they
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 still had the
amount
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same number
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 of participants. From 2020 to 2025, the joiners of
film
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the film
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 club took up the highest rate, approximately at 65
people
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, followed by martial arts,
amateur
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dramatics
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 and
table
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tennis
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 at over 30, 29 and 20
people
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, respectively.
Neverthless
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Nevertheless
, there are some remarkable events from 2025 to 2030, the decreasing figure of
amateur
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dramatics
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 and the increasing data of
table
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tennis
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 will hit the same point at about 20
people
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and
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, and
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 the
established
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establishment
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 of musical performances in 2025. There is a prediction for the number of
people
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 between 2030 and 2040,
film
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the film
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 club will remain
unchange
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unchanged
and
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, and
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 it
still
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will still
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 hold the first rank with nearly 70
people
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, followed by
table
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tennis
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at
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with
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 over 50
people
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.
Moreover
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,
table
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tennis
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 will fluctuate from 30 to 40 participants
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while
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, while
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amateur
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dramatics
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 hit the lowest point at under 10 members. It can be projected that musical performances will have
the
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a
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 sustainable
rose
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rise
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at the end
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 of the period.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, table, tennis, amateur, dramatics with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 5 times.
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