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Band 4.5

Write a letter to a colleague who gave you a book that helped you for presentation at work. Describe the presentation Why was it important? How did it help you?

Dear Ali, I hope
this
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 message finds you well and that
every thing
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 is going great. I'm writing to express my sincere gratitude for
Last
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 week, I successfully presented on "Advanced Topics in IoT" in front of 50 participants. The presentation was crucial for me to get a promotion in my career.
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 the IoT is fascinating, it requires a deep understanding and vast knowledge
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 its basics. I would like to thank you for the book which you gave me. It was very useful and significantly helped me in preparing my show. The illustrations and diagrams made preparing the slides
easily
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 and
clearly
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. The
audiences
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were
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 very
satsisfied
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satisfied
 with the contents of the proposal, my manager
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 certified me with a thankful certification for making
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 demonstration. Thank you very much for your assistance. Best wishes, Lamis

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grammar
Check small spell and cap errors in the note.
structure
Put one idea in each part or line to help reading.
content
Explain in a simple way how the book helped you in one line.
coherence
Use clear links between parts so the note can flow.
tone
End with a short good bye or thanks.
tone
Polite tone and kind thanks to Ali.
content
Shows how the book helped you in work.
content
Gives the name of the talk and the action you took.
Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • thank you
  • book
  • help
  • talk
  • topic
  • people
  • room
  • time
  • plan
  • start
  • end
  • clear
  • simple
  • slides
  • notes
  • practice
  • confidence
  • goal
  • team
  • project
  • next steps
  • questions
  • ideas
  • feedback
  • use
  • share
  • future
  • this
  • that
  • for
  • with
  • in
  • on
  • at
  • from
  • my
  • our
  • we
  • you
  • they
  • it
  • best
  • good
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