JANUARY 18 Part 1:The charts below show the figure for work hours per week in the industrial sector in four European countries in 2002.

The diagrams illustrate the data about the amount of time
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demands from humans in 4 divergent countries in Europe in 2002.
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,
while
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the 36-40
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of work
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popular in 3 countries, in
France
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France,
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the trend was different. In Denmark, the figure, which indicates 36-40
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hours
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represented 70%,followed by 31-35, accounting for approximately 23%.In Denmark, the figure indicating 36–40
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represented about 70%, followed by the 31–35-hour category, which accounted for approximately 23%. The remaining categories were small in comparison, showing around 10% or less. A similar trend can be seen in Sweden, where the proportion of employees working 36–40
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was the highest with 80%,which was followed by people working 31–35
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, indicating about 35%,
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all other
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groups
showed significantly lower figures.
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, France recorded its highest percentage in the 31–35-hour group, at about 50%,
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approximately 35% of workers turned out to be
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in the
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36–40-hour category. The 41-45 showed the
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noticeable
indication of about 25%,which is more worth sharing than other rates representing about 10%.In the UK,
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36–40
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remained the most common working time at about 50%, a larger
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proportion
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of employees worked more
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compared with the other countries, especially in the 46–50 and 50+ hour groups.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words hours with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "represented" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 7 times.
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