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Band 5

Write a letter to a colleague who gave you a book that helped you for presentation at work. Describe the presentation Why was it important? How did it help you?

Dear Adam, I hope you are doing fine. I am writing
this
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 letter to thank you for your kind help. It was a great book, helped me perform well in my meeting. Basically, I am
member
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a member
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 of
safety
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the safety
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 unit in my company
and
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, and
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 once
in
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a month we are discussing about occupational health. It was
on
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last
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monday
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Monday
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, I had my presentation about fall prevention at
job
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my job
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. I was hosting that meeting. So, it was crucial for me to perform well.
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, during my preparation, I had
idea
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an idea
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on
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of
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 creating basic
power-point
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PowerPoint
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 slides, but I was
laking
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lacking
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 in some
advance
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 skills. Fortunately, that book gave me
sound
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a sound
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 idea on navigation and selecting
contets
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contents
 with great visuals.
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, I prepared well, I ended that seminar with great confidence
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, and
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my all
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all my
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 managers appreciated me a lot in
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the end
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. Following that,
few
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a few
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 of my colleagues
also
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ask
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asked
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 me
and
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, and
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 I suggested
them
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apply
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the same book you gave me. Well, I acknowledge your support
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, and
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 I wish you
have
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apply
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a
wornderful
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wonderful
 week
,
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.
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 I will call you
in
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over
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weekend
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the weekend
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. Yours
truely
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truly
, Isac.

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grammar
Fix big spelling and grammar mistakes. Use short, clear sentences.
structure
content
You thank the colleague and say how the book helps your talk.
impact
You tell how the talk went and that managers liked your work.
tone
You end with a kind line and say you will call again.
Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • thank you
  • book
  • help
  • talk
  • topic
  • people
  • room
  • time
  • plan
  • start
  • end
  • clear
  • simple
  • slides
  • notes
  • practice
  • confidence
  • goal
  • team
  • project
  • next steps
  • questions
  • ideas
  • feedback
  • use
  • share
  • future
  • this
  • that
  • for
  • with
  • in
  • on
  • at
  • from
  • my
  • our
  • we
  • you
  • they
  • it
  • best
  • good
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