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Write a letter to a colleague who gave you a book that helped you for presentation at work. Describe the presentation Why was it important? How did it help you?

Hello
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Hello,
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 my friend, I want to share my happiness
for
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about
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 my
presentation
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. In the
presentation
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, everything was great , and I was able to express my thoughts about the topic thanks to the
book
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 that you gave me. Reflecting on preparing the
presentation
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, the
book
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 helped me a lot with the topic that I didn't find any resources to understand . Because the high-order statistic is very hard to understand, the
book
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 clarifies everything I need for the
presentation
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. The
presentation
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 is very important for my master's degree,
then
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finally
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 I have
finally
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 completed
.
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it.
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 A lot of people attended the
presentation
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 , and everyone wants to see what I have to say about the topic. They
also
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havealso
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have
 a lot of questions after the
presentation
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 , which I was worried about before it. I made a few pages for the examples that I found in the
book
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 , and I think that everybody can easily understand
it
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them
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.
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, before the end, I have added a recap slide to look for the big picture. It gives me confidence , and I
finally
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 feel relaxed. Thank you so much for your help and time. See you soon.

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grammar
Fix small grammar and spelling mistakes, like 'hasalso' and awkward phrasing. Use periods and capital letters.
structure
Break into clear paragraphs with one idea in each. Start with a short line saying what the letter is about.
greeting closing
Add a clear closing line for a letter, such as 'Best regards, [Name]'.
content
Be more specific about what the book taught you and add a tiny example from the talk to show impact.
tone
Keep a friendly tone but use simple and safe sentences. Avoid long, mixed sentences.
content
Warm and kind tone toward your friend.
content
You show how the book helped with the talk.
content
You explain why the talk mattered for your degree.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • thank you
  • book
  • help
  • talk
  • topic
  • people
  • room
  • time
  • plan
  • start
  • end
  • clear
  • simple
  • slides
  • notes
  • practice
  • confidence
  • goal
  • team
  • project
  • next steps
  • questions
  • ideas
  • feedback
  • use
  • share
  • future
  • this
  • that
  • for
  • with
  • in
  • on
  • at
  • from
  • my
  • our
  • we
  • you
  • they
  • it
  • best
  • good
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