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The use of social media is replacing face-to-face interaction among many people in society. Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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Introduction
There is no denying the fact that
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using
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 is replacing
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face
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 interaction among a lot of
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people
 in society.
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 held belief that
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social
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 will change the
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people
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way people
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 form
face
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 to
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 to apps to
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. There is
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 an argument that many
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 think
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social
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meeting
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meetings
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 among
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 in society .
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 essay will analyse
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different
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 of view and express my opinion.
Body · 1
In
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 one hand, social
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 has many
benefit
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 for
people
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 to
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connect with
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people
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 from
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different
 countries .
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, social
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 helps
helps
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students who study
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abroad
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 family or friends.
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, many
people
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who
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use social
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 to communicate with
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their
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customer
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customers
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.
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 , many
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businessman
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businessmen
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 who use social
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 to interview
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 products for many
people
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instead
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 of
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 shops .
Body · 2
In
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 the other hand , social
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 has many disadvantages to children
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from many
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people
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use
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 to change
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 thinking . It is possible to say that many
of
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apply
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people
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 working in social
media
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 to change the
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children's
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minds
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 by
made
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making
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 many
video
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videos
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in
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on
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,
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social
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 makes our lives fake.
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, a lot of
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famous
poeple
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people
 who
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use
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 to be
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while
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 some
people
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 who
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 to do like him.
Conclusion
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conclusion
, there is no easy answer for
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 topic. On balance ,
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, I consider that
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social
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 has many
benefit
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in
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at
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same
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the same
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 time has many disadvantages to
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users
but
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 the important thing
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socail
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social
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.

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language
Fix spelling and grammar; many words are wrong.
structure
Make a plan and use clear topic sentence for each paragraph.
content
Give clear examples to support points.
task
State your position in one line at the end.
content
The essay tries to cover both sides of the issue.
task
There is some use of linking words, and a final view is stated.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • face-to-face interaction
  • geographical barriers
  • global community
  • cultural diversity
  • economic opportunities
  • superficial interactions
  • mental health impact
  • loneliness
  • depression
  • interpersonal relationships
  • real world
  • spread of misinformation
  • echo chambers
  • societal polarization
  • informed citizenship
  • constant connectivity
  • maintain relationships
  • fast and efficient
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