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Band 4

The use of social media is replacing face-to-face interaction among many people in society. Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

There is no denying the fact that
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 interaction among a lot of
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people
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social
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meeting
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 in society .
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 of view and express my opinion.
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people
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different
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students who study
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abroad
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customer
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customers
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businessman
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businessmen
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 who use social
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from many
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people
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 thinking . It is possible to say that many
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people
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children's
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, a lot of
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famous
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, there is no easy answer for
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, I consider that
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users
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planning
Plan your essay before writing. Write a short plan with your view and the ideas you will use.
structure
Make a clear intro and a short conclusion. State your view in the intro.
structure
Make one idea in each paragraph. Start with a topic sentence.
grammar
Use simple, correct grammar. Check common misspellings.
content
Give real but simple examples to show your point.
cohesion
Use linking words to show flow, like 'however', 'also', 'for example'.
content
Essay tries to cover both sides of the issue.
structure
It ends with a view on the topic.
content
There are some examples about business uses.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • face-to-face interaction
  • geographical barriers
  • global community
  • cultural diversity
  • economic opportunities
  • superficial interactions
  • mental health impact
  • loneliness
  • depression
  • interpersonal relationships
  • real world
  • spread of misinformation
  • echo chambers
  • societal polarization
  • informed citizenship
  • constant connectivity
  • maintain relationships
  • fast and efficient
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