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The best way to educate children is by using Internet in every lesson.To what extent do you share this option?What other ways are there of making lessons effective for children?

It is sometimes thought that using
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 in every lesson is the most effective method to teach children. I partially agree with
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while
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 certainly
enrichess
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enriches
 the learning process, there are several other effective methods a teacher can use in
lessons
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 to
enhace
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enhance
 classroom learning. Many people
view
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 that
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internet
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 should be used in every lesson to make the learning process more effective.
Firstly
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, it has a massive pool of information available, virtually on any topic
one
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off
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, which has made it easier for students to find a piece of information
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relevant
 to the topic.
Secondly
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, with the help of online digital
platforms
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 children can see the videos
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apply
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 and images to visualise the concepts taught in the class.
In addition
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 to that,
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 has become
far reaching
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 and affordable, which ensures accessibility for every student.
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, I partially agree with
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internet
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, there are many other methods as effective as
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 available at the disposal of educators.
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, encouraging students to apply the learned
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 practically, or asking them to solve challenges from
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 world
applying
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 the same learnt concepts during
lessons
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One
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live
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 interaction, and it facilitates exchange of ideas between them
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 of
this
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 gets refined, and it
aid s
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aids
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 children in retaining the knowledge for longer periods. In conclusion, I acknowledge that
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internet
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the internet
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 is a powerful tool to educate young minds, but using only
one
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 tool in every lesson makes learning
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one dimension
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.
Therefore
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, it is important to implement other effective ways
such
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 as live discussions, and practical
applicaton
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application
 of learned concepts to
further
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enhace
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 the learning experience.

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Make your point steadier. State your view clearly at the start and keep a simple line in each paragraph to back it up.
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Add real, small examples from class to show how internet helps and how it can slow or miss other work.
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Your finish should be strong. Restate your view in a short, clear way and give one last idea.
coherence guidance
Try shorter, sharper sentences. Use punctuation and avoid long strings of ideas.
language guidance
Check spelling and fix small errors like relavant, enhace, aid s, off, beliefs.
Strength
Clear view of fit between internet use and other methods.
Strength
Good basic structure with intro, body, and conclusion.
Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

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