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Band 4

It is better for university students to live away fromhome during their university studies rather thanstaying with their parents. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Most people think it will be completely easy to adapt to wherever they go when they leave for
education
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educational
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 purposes. What they forget or don'
t
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 care
is
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about is
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 how hard it is to find a job if they don'
t
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 have
a
Correct article usage
apply
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family support
which
Punctuation problem
, which
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 most people don'
t
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.
Verb problem
have.
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 And they end up taking student loans they won'
t
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able
Verb problem
be able
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 to
play
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pay
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even
Change preposition
off even
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 if they get a
high paid
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high-paying
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 job.
Besides
Linking Words
 that, students struggle
finding
Wrong verb form
to find
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a
Correct article usage
an
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 apartment to rent for staying. And after
that
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that,
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 they have a hard time navigating in a city they didn'
t
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 leave before

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general
State a clear view on the topic. Say if you agree or disagree, and give reasons with simple examples.
structure
Make one main idea in each paragraph and use linking words like first, next, also, but to connect ideas.
grammar
Check grammar and form, especially article use (a, an), verb forms, and subject-verb agreement.
content
Give realistic, plain examples such as cost of rent, loan, travel, and study time.
content
Aim for a clear answer to the question and keep a simple, straight line in your argument.
content
The writer talks about real issues for students, like money and housing.
structure
The writing uses simple words and basic sentence structure at times.
content
The topic is close to student life and study.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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