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The charts Below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the word. summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons were relevant.

The charts Below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the word. summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons were relevant.
The pie charts illustrate the
use
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 of
water
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 for various purposes in six
areas
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 globally. The data was presented in percentages.
Overall
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, in four
areas
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, the
use
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 of
water
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 is mostly for the agricultural sector.
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 in the other two
areas
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, the biggest portion is for Industrial
use
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.
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 all six
areas
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 were using
water
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 for domestic
use
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 the least. South
America
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, Africa, Central
Asia
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 and South East
Asia
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 used
water
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 for agriculture the most , with the data showing the numbers of 71%, 84%, 88% and 81% respectively. Whilst North
America
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 only used 39% and Europe 32% for
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 field.
On the other hand
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, North
America
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 and Europe had the highest value in Industrial
use
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 at around 50%. The other four regions only scored around 5 to 12 %.
In Addition
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 to the
use
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 for Domestic purposes, all six
areas
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 spent the lowest percentage. North
America
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, South
America
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 and Europe scored just under 20% and Africa, Central
Asia
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, and South East
Asia
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valued
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scored
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 just under 10%.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words use, water, areas, america, asia with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "just under" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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