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The line graph shows the sales of gold in Dubai for 12 months in 2002 in millions of Dirhams. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph illustrates the
sales
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 of
gold
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 in Dubai throughout 2002, measured in millions of
dirhams
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.
Overall
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,
gold
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sales
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 peaked in March,
while
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 the lowest figures were recorded in July and August at nearly the same level. In January,
gold
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sales
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 stood at about 200
million
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dirhams
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 and rose slightly in February.
This
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 upward trend continued, reaching a peak of approximately 350
million
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dirhams
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 in March.
However
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,
sales
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then
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 declined steadily from April, falling to around 250
million
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dirhams
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, before reaching their lowest point of about 100
million
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dirhams
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 in July.
After
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this
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 period,
sales
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 showed a slight recovery in August, followed by another decrease in September. Towards the end of the year,
gold
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sales
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 gradually increased again, finishing at just under 200
million
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dirhams
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, close to the level recorded at the beginning of the year.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 78%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sales, gold, dirhams, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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