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The chart below shows the number of households in the US by their annual income in 2007, 2011 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The data illustrates the proportion of the price of
house
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houses
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 in the US by their annual income in 2007, 2011and 2015. Between 2007 and 2011, income less than $25000
increase
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increased
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about
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by about
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 25% to 28%. $25,000 - $49,999
also
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not
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does not
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 change too much, 27% to near 30%. $50,000 - $74,999
still
Verb problem
is still
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 under 15%. And $100,000 or more is the highest number of households in
US
Correct article usage
the US
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 in 2007 - 2011.
However
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, it
decrease
Wrong verb form
decreased
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 from 29.5% to 27%. In 2015, $75,000 - $99,999
has
Verb problem
apply
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changed
2
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by 2
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%, in 14% to 15%, but it
still
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was still
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 the least in 2015. $100,000 or more
always
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is always
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be
Verb problem
apply
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the best of the number of
household
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households
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 with 33%. $25,000 - $49,999 is 27% and less than $25,000 is still stay in its place. $50,000 - $74,999
alswo
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also
 not change, about 21 - 22%. $25,000 - $49,999 and $100,000 or more of household
is
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income is
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 popular in
US
Correct article usage
the US
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. And $75,000 - $99,999 is less.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • household distribution
  • income brackets
  • annual income
  • percentage change
  • trend analysis
  • income group
  • significant increase/decrease
  • steady growth/decline
  • fluctuations
  • compared to
  • in contrast
  • notably
  • median income
  • poverty line
  • economic factors
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