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The most important aim of science should be to improve people's live.to what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

These days
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people
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, people
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 are becoming concerned
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people
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that
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the important target of
science
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improve
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to improve
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life
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the lives
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 of
people
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.In my
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,I agree with
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while
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 it is true that
science
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bring
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brings
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 many
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,I believe that
science
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 has more
benefit
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benefits
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 in
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life
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the lives
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 of
people
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people
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 less experience in real
life
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.The reason behind
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people
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in
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although
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people
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 in real
life
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has
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less experiment
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fewer experiments
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 to solve common
problem
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problems
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.
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for
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For
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 instance,a recent study conducted by
Havard university
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Harvard University
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 showed that 60% young
people
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 communicate
face to face
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face-to-face
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 less than
people
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past
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the past
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 generation
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is increase
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problem
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problems
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 like stress.
On the other hand
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,
People
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 improve
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knowledge
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their knowledge
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.
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fact
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the fact
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 that
people
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 learn every day
in
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 social
platform
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platforms
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 like
facebook
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Facebook
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,
tik tok
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TikTok
,X,...
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 platform has much
knowledge
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 about all
topic
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topics
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 of
science
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,a recent study conducted by Oxford
university
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 showed that 80%
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 learned more information in our day,
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people
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 more
platform
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platforms
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 in school,
in
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on
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 social
network
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networks
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 and
Ai
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AI
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 like
gemini
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GPT
 or
chat gpt
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ChatGPT
….
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Science
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knowledge
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make
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makes
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 society more convenient because
people
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learned
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 more information
,
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it
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apply
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 improve the creation of
people
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for
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knowledge
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it that
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which
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more
invention
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inventions
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of
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in
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 technology.Today
China
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, China
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 is the first
of using
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AI
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 to develop. In conclusion,
while
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science
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 has some
disadvantage
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disadvantages
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,
however
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believe
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 that
science
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 has more
benefit
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benefits
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 for
people
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 and countries.

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structure
Plan before you write. Make a simple plan with four ideas. Start with what you think, then give two why, and a short end.
grammar
Use easy words. Keep a calm tone. Check big spelling errors.
cohesion
Make each part hold one main idea. Use 'and', 'but', 'so' to join ideas.
examples
Give easy and true examples from life.
task
Be sure to answer the question. Say why you think this view is best and do not go off track.
content
You show a view and try to keep a line.
effort
You add some reasons and some facts.
structure
Some parts are easy to read because of short ideas.
Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • advancement
  • innovations
  • sustainability
  • renewable energy
  • biotechnology
  • quality of life
  • environmental issues
  • climate change
  • pollution
  • technological
  • efficiency
  • sustainable practices
  • food security
  • agricultural
  • crop yields
  • nutrition
  • economic development
  • industries
  • poverty reduction
  • education
  • knowledge dissemination
  • informed decision-making
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