You recently organized an all-day meeting for your company, which took place in a local hotel. In their feedback, participants at the meeting said they liked the hotel, but they were unhappy about the food served for lunch. Write a letter to the manager of the hotel. In your letter •Say what the participant liked about the hotel. •Explain why they were unhappy about the hotel. •Suggest what the manager should do to improve the food in the future.

Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing
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letter to inform you about our recent visit
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your
hotel
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for an all-day meeting, which was
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by me for the company
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I work for. I want to bring
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to your notice that the participants were extremely pleased with the ambience of the
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, but they were not happy with the
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served
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lunch. The entrance was very beautiful, because of the rare flowers and cleanliness
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.
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, there was enough parking space
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for all the employees.
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, the architecture of the
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was eye-catching too, and Everyone was thrilled to participate in the meeting there.
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, the
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in the lunch was not
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the mark.
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, they were disappointed by the amount of
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served at the table, because the options for
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people
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were
less
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as
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compared
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meat lovers.
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that, the
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was spicy
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also
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, which has impacted the health of several people there. I would recommend you to please take
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extra care of the meals served next time
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is important to run the business with
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customer satisfaction.
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, people would not consider your
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as
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right place for meetings. I hope you will consider my suggestion
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and take an appropriate action. Yours sincerely, Shifali Arora

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structure
Write a short opening paragraph to state the purpose of the letter.
coherence
Make each paragraph hold one idea. Use short sentences.
grammar
Fix grammar like 'not up to the mark' and 'please take extra care' to be natural.
vocabulary
Use simple words and clear tone; avoid too many long phrases.
tone
The letter has a polite tone and a clear request.
content
It notes both good and bad points, which shows balance.
formal features
Opening 'Dear Sir/Madam' and closing 'Yours sincerely' fit formal letter style.
content
It gives a concrete change area: more veg options, portion size, control spice.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite
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