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Write a letter to the building manager. In your latter, -describe the noisy behavior of your neighbor, -expain how it is affecting you, -suggest a solution to this problem.

Dear Mr Adam, I am writing
this
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 letter to inform you about the noisy behaviour of my neighbour, living on the top floor. I wanted to bring
this
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 to your notice that she was continuously stomping on the floor yesterday, and when I told her to be
little
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a little
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 careful
while
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 walking, she was yelling
on
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at
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 me unnecessarily.
Moreover
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, weekends are always extremely noisy for us, because of the party
,
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 she arranges at her place. Not only
the
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 loud music
irritates
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irritate
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 us from her apartment
but
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, but
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also
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her shouting behaviour is
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 very annoying. I want to let you know that it is affecting not only me but
my children
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also my children
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also
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 in several ways.
Firstly
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, we are unable to sleep properly
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the
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night, because of the loud music
during
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 the house party.
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she has no manners to talk to kids
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also
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, also
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,
hence
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 she has become intolerable for us.
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 that, the normal noise of living is fine, but it is beyond the limit to understand. I suggest you
to
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visit the building and provide her
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with the
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 appropriate warning. So, she can understand the civic sense of living in an apartment because noise travels faster through wooden structures.
Otherwise
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,
i
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I
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 would like to provide you
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 final notice for my
last
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 month if you
will
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do
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 not take any action immediately. I hope you will consider it
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 I will wait for your response. Yours sincerely, Shifali Arora

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content
Be calm and fair. Say what action you want and give a date to act.
structure
Put one main idea in each paragraph. Open with the issue, then say how it affects you, then say what you want done.
tone
Avoid threats or bad words. A polite tone helps get action.
content
The letter tells what the problem is.
content
It notes how the noise hurts you and your family.
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It names a plan to fix it.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • noisy behavior
  • disturbance
  • affecting my well-being
  • inability to focus
  • disrupted sleep
  • frequent parties
  • odd hours
  • stress levels
  • propose a solution
  • building policy
  • quiet hours
  • neighborhood etiquette
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