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Band 4

In some countries there are more young people choosing to enrol in work-based training instead of attending university. Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

There is no denying the fact that the study is very important to
enahance pepole
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enhance people's
skills
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while
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 it is
commonly
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 held belief that in many countries around the world the teenagers choose to join to
work
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workforce
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than
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rather than
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they
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apply
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countnue thire highe
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continue their higher
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also there is
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un
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 argument that some
peopl
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people
 think
join
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joining
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 to
work
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workforce
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 is more butter than
education
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essay
 will analyse
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 topic from both points of view and express my opinion. On hand, improve your communication
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, student can enhance their
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 when they continue
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universties
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universities
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,
studey
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studying
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students
 to get international
jobs
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, student will get a real job
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and
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jobs
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 in big
company
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companies
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 around the world if
the
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they
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compleat
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complete
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universty
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university
.
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join in
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instead
study
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of studying
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 has many
issue
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issues
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. It is
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possible
 to say that people who
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 not
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completed
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higher
education
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menas
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means
 without any
skills
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, people who choose to
left
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leave
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 school had
limted
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limited
 career growth.
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, nations without
education
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menas witout
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mean without
future
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a future
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and
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 their
jobs
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limtead
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limited
so
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 they can not
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 their job. In
counclusion
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conclusion
, there is no easy
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answer
 to
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 question. In my
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opinion
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 I consider that
education
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 is
extramly
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extremely
 important in our
live
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 and future.
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 is because everything in
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needed
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needs
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skills
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 and
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learning
leran
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leran,
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whiout
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without
 them we
can no
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cannot
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 live . All in all , student should
completed
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complete
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 their
education
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 to
enhanch
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enhance
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communicatin
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communication
skills
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 and to get
internatinal
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international
jobs
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 in a
wndeful
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wonderful
 company .

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grammar
Check words and spell and use simple forms.
coherence
Put each idea in one part and make the link to next idea clear.
content
Give a real example for each idea so you show how it works.
lexical
Use short, easy sentences. Avoid long, hard words.
planning
Plan what you will write first and then write.
structure
Finish with a short end that restates your view.
content
The writer tries to discuss both sides of the issue.
perspective
The writer states a clear view.
structure
There is a sense of overall plan in the piece.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • work-based training
  • enrol
  • university
  • advantages
  • disadvantages
  • practical skills
  • experience
  • workforce
  • employment
  • earnings
  • opportunities
  • further education
  • theoretical knowledge
  • career options
  • exploitation
  • balance
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