Some people like to be the owners of the place where they live, but other people like to rent accommodation. Discuss both views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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it is commonly thought
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the host of their own living space, others believe renting for a shelter is much more of a deal. I'm going to discuss these opposing points of view. In my opinion, what in your needs matter the most, with a variety
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experiences
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experiences,
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people should choose what they
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On the one hand, it is argued that you must own where you live. The main reason is that when you hold the power of being your own boss, you become more
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powerful
. You will confidently make the decision in your
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, the way you behave or how you
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achieve your goals. It is
also
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possible to say that you feel more at ease,
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this
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would enhance the efficiency in how fast your body
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your energy.
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, after spending all your energy on a social activity, you come back to your own house, feeling free from all the
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take a deep rest knowing
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being secured. Another reason is that you can freely hold a party at any time.
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, it is not
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worry
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you
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for disturbing
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to disturb
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your
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or pay a good amount to repair the staining mark on your carpet after a crazy night.
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, it is strongly believed by others that having accommodation to rent is a big
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life time
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lifetime saving. People often have
this
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opinion because there are numerous difficulties in
life
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and
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having a place to sleep over a night than getting ready to
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solve
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those
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tactics is not
so big to
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worth
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considerate
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. A second point is that renting would be more beneficial for people whose
job
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require a large
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amount
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of time not being home.
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, they could be the host for their own
renting
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rented
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room,
slipt
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split
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up the money with
another
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other
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rent
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friends. By
that
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that,
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they still hold the accommodation
with
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half
of
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the price and still
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their job. In conclusion, it is commonly thought that to be the owner where you live
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, meanwhile
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, others assume that
rent
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renting
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accommodation is more useful điểm. Personally, I tend to believe that it is
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different
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of
live
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life
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. As a student, renting
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not consume too much of a budget
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, but
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as you are in your
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all you need is
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to be
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stable
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stable,
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then
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buy
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a house would be a great consideration.

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language
Improve grammar and spelling to make your meaning clear.
structure
Write a clear intro that states the topic and your view, then two balanced body paragraphs with topic sentences.
coherence
Use simple linking words to connect ideas (for example, first, also, however, in addition).
examples
Provide a specific example that supports your point and explain it.
content
Attempts to address both views and give a personal opinion.
content
Has some relevant examples.
coherence
Some use of linking words appears.
Word Count

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