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Technology has changed the way people communicatr today. Some people belive this is making our relationship stronger while others believe it is harming them. Discuss both points of view and give your own opinion.

Nowadays,
technology
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 has changed the way
people
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 communicate with each other. Some
people
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 believe that
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 development makes
relationships
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 stronger,
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 others think it is harming them.
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 essay will discuss both views and give my opinion. On the one hand,
technology
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 helps
people
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 to keep their
relationships
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 strong.
People
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 can communicate easily with their family and friends by using social media and video calls.
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, if someone lives far from his family, he can still talk to them every day and see them online.
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 makes
people
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 feel closer than before and helps to maintain good
relationships
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.
On the other hand
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, some
people
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 believe that
technology
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 has a negative effect on
relationships
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. One reason is that many
people
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 spend too much time using their phones
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 of meeting others in real life.
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, some
people
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 prefer chatting online rather than talking
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. Because of
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, real
relationships
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 can become weaker
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people
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 may feel lonely. In conclusion,
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technology
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 can cause some problems, I believe it mostly helps
people
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 stay connected. In my opinion,
technology
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 is useful, but
people
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 should use it in a correct way and not too much.

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development
Add more full ideas for each side and give a clearer fact or example.
coherence
Use more linking words to show how ideas go together, like also, in addition, because of this.
grammar
Check small mistakes and use simple grammar correctly.
task
End with a stronger finish by restating your view and the main idea.
structure
Clear plan with start, middle, and end.
content
Shows both sides and gives your view.
content
Simple example helps show how tech keeps contact.
Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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