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Technology has changed the way people communicatr today. Some people belive this is making our relationship stronger while others believe it is harming them. Discuss both points of view and give your own opinion.

There is no denying the fact 
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technology
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that technology
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communicatr
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communicator
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it
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 is a commonly held
blief
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belief
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people
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relationship
be
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 solid, there is
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 an argument that
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believes
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damaging
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.
This
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 essay will analyse
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 topic from both points of view and express my opinion. On one hand,
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improves our relationship and will be strong .
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words
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 we are closer than the past
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,we can
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 see all the
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them
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in the apps.
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, but
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 can contact
with
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them
on
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through
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the
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apply
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technology
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also i can
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this
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these
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thinks
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things
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 it good for
keep
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keeping
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 the relationship strong .
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,
people
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that the
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technology
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caused harm. It is
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Moreover
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people
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use
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point of
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a lot
 of
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people
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brok
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our
relations
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relationships
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 or
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relationship
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relationships
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for
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just
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the
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just
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also
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 that person usually
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meet
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to meet
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people
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real life
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. This
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is biggest
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 humanity has reached today. In conclusion, there are no easy answers to
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 question. On balance,
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, I tend to believe that for
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the
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, the
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technology
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 today
give
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gives
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for
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that for
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 can keep the
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relationships
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me,
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also
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i
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 can know
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abut
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 them where they are.

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structure
Make a plain idea plan before you write. Say your view in a short line in the first par and end with the same idea.
language
Use short, clear sentences. Check for grammar and spelling before you finish.
content
Give real, simple examples that fit life to prove a point.
coherence
Use linking words to show flow, like but, also, and, in addition.
content
The essay tries to show both sides and give a view.
organization
There is a try to use an intro and an end.
Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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