The bar chart shows the percentage of adult male smokers in seven countries along with the world average in 2000 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart compares the percentage of male smokers from seven countries with the average smokers around the
world
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in 2000 and 2015.
Overall
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, Armenia shows the highest number,
while
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Australia
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has the lowest percentage in both years. In 2000, when the average
world
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had approximately 42% of male smokers, Armenia, Bangladesh, and Cuba had more, with 65%, 62%, and 53% respectively.
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, Egypt, Lebanon, and Mexico had a similar total, about 35%, below the
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average.
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,
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just had below 30% of a male population. Different from 2000, in 2015, Armenia and Cuba had the same number, which was more than 50%.
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, Egypt was slightly below 50%, Lebanon was about 45%, and even Bangladesh was below 40%. These numbers were higher compared to the average
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, with just 33%.
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, with the range between 10-20%, there were Mexico and
Australia
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,
whereas
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Australia
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also
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got the lowest percentage over time.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words world, australia with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • bar chart, percentage, adult male smokers
  • world average, increased, decreased
  • tobacco consumption, lung cancer
  • public health, awareness campaigns
  • government policy, smoking bans
  • health risks, nicotine, tobacco industry
  • chart analysis, data comparison
  • statistical trend, significant fluctuation
  • stagnation, steady rise, moderate fall
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