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Nowadays more and more people are using cell phones and computers to communicate with others. Therefore, they are losing the ability of face-to-face communication. To what extent do you agree or disagree

It is a debate whether using technology devices undermines interactions among
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 in person or not. From my point of view, I reckon that online communication surely leads to the loss of abilities. First and foremost, the frequency
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phones and computers increases significantly, which contributes to
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 effects. Apparently, the way
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 the mode of talking face-to-face are different from those online. Only needed to type texts on the Internet,
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 it is necessary to check our face expressions, body language, and appearance when facing others.
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, to react immediately seems to be more difficult
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than postponing reply time. Escaping from
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 to others directly is definitely a feature of being unfamiliar with communication, which
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 widens the distance between
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. There's no denying the fact that the advent of technology has changed the way
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 communicate, and it even enables
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 in contact anytime and anywhere.
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, from my perspective,
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 online interactions fail to lead to
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 communications. To illustrate, many online
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 images when meeting in person. They seem to be
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talkative
 and outgoing;
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, there is nothing to say in reality, resulting
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 vibe they get along doesn't meet expectations.
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, to establish intimate connections needs face-to-face interactions. From what has been discussed above, we may safely draw the conclusion that the defects of contacting online outweigh its merits, which
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 the ability to talk to others in person.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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