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The chart belowshows the types of communication training taken by employees in an international company and the reasons whythey took part in this training.

The first pie chart illustrates the types of
communication
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 training taken by employees in an international company,
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 the second pie chart illustrates
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reasons
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 why they took part in
this
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 training.
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, evening part-time training was the most popular form of
communication
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 training,
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weekends
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 part-time training and self-tuition were equally common. In terms of
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, holiday travel was by far the main motivation,
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 the remaining factors accounted for relatively smaller and similar proportions. Regarding
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 training, the dominant category was evening part-time training,which represented 39%, almost eight times as high as distant learning (5%) .
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 part-time training makes up the same percentage as self-tuition , at 22%. The smallest proportion is for distant learning, at 5%,
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 intensive training accounted for 12%. As for
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, the holiday travel
accounts
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 for the largest percentage, at 46%, which is more than four times the figure for
communication
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 with
client
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clients
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(10%). Business Travel
accounts
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 for 17% and Other
Reasons
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accounts
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 for 13%.
Communication
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 With Clients
accounts
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 for the smallest share,at 10%.

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task
State the main idea at the start and give a clear end line that sums up the charts.
coherence
Keep a simple order in each part. Put the main point first, then the data.
grammar
Use easy words only and check spell and form while writing.
overview
The idea is clear and the charts are shown.
data
Numbers are used to show the main facts.
coherence
The two ideas fit well and are easy to follow.
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