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The chart belowshows the types of communication training taken by employees in an international company and the reasons whythey took part in this training.

The pie charts illustrate the types of communication training taken by
employees
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 in an international company and the
reasons
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 why they participated in
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 training.
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, part-time evening courses were by far the most popular form of training,
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 intensive training was the least common.
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, most
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 attended the training for work-related
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 rather than personal ones. In terms of training types, part-time evening training accounted for the largest proportion at 39%.
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 was followed by self-study and part-time weekend courses, which made up 22% each. Digital learning was less popular, representing 15% of the total,
while
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 intensive training was chosen by the smallest share of
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, at only 12%. Regarding the
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 for joining the training, other
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 dominated, making up 46% of responses. Holiday travel was the second most common motivation at 17%, followed by business travel, which accounted for 14%.
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, fewer
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 attended the training for communication with clients (13%), and personal interest was the least significant reason, at just 10%.

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structure
Add a short closing line to sum up the chart facts.
data
Check the numbers and keep all data point in the same way as the chart.
lexical
Use more basic phrases and simpler words so it fits the top 100 word list.
coherence
Make each idea clear and keep the same idea in one paragraph.
task response
Clear view of main trends and the share of each type.
coherence
Good order of ideas from types to reasons.
data usage
Data is well used to back the points.
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