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The two pie charts below show total world energy consumption and electricity generation for last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The two pie charts
provides
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provide
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 key
informetion
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information
 about total
world
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 energy consumption and electricity generation for
last
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 year. The units are measured in percentage.
Overall
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, it is clear from the graph that total
world
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 energy consumption
it
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apply
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is highest using
oil
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oil,
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it
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at
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 nearly
to
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apply
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37.3 per
cent
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 .
In addition
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 total
world
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 electricity generation
the
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is the
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highest
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highest,
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 is coal
using
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accounting for
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 about 39.8 per
cent
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 ,
whereas
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 the
less
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 is other stuff
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, using
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using
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accounting for
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 2.1 per
cent
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 .
According to
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 what is shown , in total
world
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 energy
consumption
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consumption,
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 the second using is
coal
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coal,
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it
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which
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 is
using
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used
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 about 25.1 per
cent
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. For the gas and combustible renewables and waste
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, using
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using
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which use
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 nearly 20.9 per
cent
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 and 10.6 per
cent
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respectlively
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respectively
. In terms of total
world
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 electricity generation, the second using is gas
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, it
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it
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at
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 nearly 19.6 per
cent
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 . After
that
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is
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apply
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came the hydro
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, it
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it
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which
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use
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uses
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 about 16.1 per
cent
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 .
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Also
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Also,
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 the nuclear they
using
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are using
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nearly
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is nearly
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 at 15.7 per
cent
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 82%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words world, cent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 4 times.
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