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Band 3

The increase in food production is mostly due to fertilisers and better machinery. Yet, some think that it harms human health and communities. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Today, fertilisers and modern technology play a crucial role in producing
food
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. Some people argue that
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 tendency has a negative effect on individuals'
overall
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 well-being. I disagree with
this
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 statement, because I believe that in today's
rapid-pace
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 modern technology
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food
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, food
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 production
are
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is
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 implemented
breathtaking
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with breathtaking
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 methods and approaches. Nowadays,
manufactories
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manufacturers
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 have produced
food
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 implementing methods that allow
to
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for
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proccess
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processing
 fertilisers in a healthy way. Because they usually
colllaborate
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collaborate
 with different experts and invest more money to develop cutting-edge technologies.
As a result
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, companies have invited breathtaking innovations related to
food
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.
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,
factories
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 can adopt processed
food
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 to make it healthier and safer for consumers.
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, today many scientists
have
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are
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 working to create a new form of meat
sintesed
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synthesised
 by different biodegradable substances.
Additionally
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, the businessmen encourage to
create
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creation
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 a new types of machinery in their
factories
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.
It's
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 helps them to remove
humanity
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human
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 factors and adopt automation systems, helping them to produce
environmental
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environmentally
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 friendly goods. Because equipment in many cases
are
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does
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 not
carrying
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carry
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 different infections and illnesses, which can spread
out
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through
factories
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 and get into a product.
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, in 1990 in China,
worker
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workers
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have
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had
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a
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an
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 infection which
leads
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led
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 to
a
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apply
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thousands of diseases among consumers. In conclusion,
while
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 some claim that modern technology and
fartilises
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fertilisers
 can negatively affect
on
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apply
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people's health. I believe that
this
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 trend has a positive impact on people, because nowadays
factories
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 have implemented different methods and approaches.

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planning
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structure
Use one idea per paragraph and link ideas with small join words like and, but, also, so.
content
Give clear and simple examples that fit your idea.
language
Check spell and grammar to make your idea easy to read.
conclusion
End with a short wrap up that restates your view.
strength
Clear view on the topic.
structure
Intro and conclusion are present.
content
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Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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