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In the past it was only possible to contact people at home by letter or telephone. Nowadays, mobile devices mean that we can communicate with people anywhere and at any time. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

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people
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use
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letter
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letters
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telephone
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telephones
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contact
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nowadays
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nowadays,
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 humans
use
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 mobile
to
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phones to
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 communicate together any
time
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advantage
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disadvantage
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 method. We will see the
advantage
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people
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people's
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 and give examples about it.
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,
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advantage
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the advantage
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about
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methods
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past
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people
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use
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 letters or
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telephone
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the telephone
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 because they
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didn't
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 have mobile
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phones and
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 technology like now, but why from
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advantage
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advantages
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going
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 to each other and talk
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telephone
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,
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don't
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didn't
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 have
bads
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bad
 habits
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don't
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a
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up a
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lot of
time
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like
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phones like
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, disadvantages from the new method to
contact
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 with
people
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use
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time
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this
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 let them have bad habits and forget them selfs like studying or eating
also
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 let's them spend a lot of
time
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contact
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 in mobile, they will forget how they talk anyone face to face plus be from
contact
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people
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To sum up
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,
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the advantage
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advantage
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advantages
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is
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are
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 more than
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the disadvantage
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disadvantage
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disadvantages
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 for
letter
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the letter
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 or
telephone
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 method it's
help
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helps
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people
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 to stay active and go out
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sit
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 and talk
in
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mobile
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a mobile
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grammar
Use short, clear sentences and fix big grammar errors.
structure
Add a short intro and a short ending that state your view.
cohesion
Have one main idea in each paragraph and use topic sentences.
content
Offer one or two real examples from life to back up points.
content
The topic is about old and new ways to talk and the ideas are on topic.
content
The writer tries to compare both sides.
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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Connectivity
  • Geographical boundaries
  • International audience
  • Social movements
  • Convenience
  • Flexibility
  • Emergency contacts
  • Productivity
  • Information accessibility
  • Dependency
  • Over-reliance
  • Face-to-face interactions
  • Privacy issues
  • Work-life boundaries
  • Uninterrupted personal time
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