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In some countries, more and more people are becoming interested in finding out about the history of the house or building they live in. What are the reasons for this? How can people research this? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

In recent years, an increasing number of
people
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 are showing interest in discovering information about
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history
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the history
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 of the place they inhabit
in
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.
This
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 essay will discuss the main reasons for
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 trend and explain how
people
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 can find out required data. There are several factors why interest in
building’s
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building
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history
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 is becoming more common. One key reason is that many
people
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 live in historical areas of the city and
interested
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are interested
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about
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in
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 its
history
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. They want to know when their house was built and who lived there. Another contributing factor is free access to
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the Internet
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 and public archives of local communities, which means that individuals can easily find out what they want without
help
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the help
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 of others.
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, my grandmother lives in
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the old
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 house of our family, which was built in 1894. Some time
ago
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ago,
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 it was extremely difficult to interact with local authorities to find documents about previous owners, but now it’s possible to find
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the chain
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 of owners via
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the Internet
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 in
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a few
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 hours. There are various ways in which
people
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 can research more about
origins
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the origins
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 of their residence. One effective method is checking
website
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the website
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 of
city’s
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the city’s
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 mayor, as it allows to find public information about owners,
date
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the date
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 of building and reconstructions.
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, online or offline libraries can
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 be useful, especially when
house
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the house
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 is old and has some historical meaning. These approaches make it easier for individuals to find out more about their accommodation.
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, interest
to
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in
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house’s
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a house’s
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 past is rapidly growing
due to
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 public awareness about
importance
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the importance
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 of
history
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 and
transparency
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the transparency
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 of online sources. By using
mentioned
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the mentioned
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methods
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methods,
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people
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 can easily achieve
necessary
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the necessary
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 information about their building.

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grammar
Fix grammar and 'make' the sentences easy. Use 'are' with 'people' and 'the help of others' with 'the'.
coherence
Make each paragraph have one main idea and give one example. Use link words to join ideas.
content
Give more detail about how to research with clear steps and short facts. Use simple words and a clear order.
structure
The essay asks for both reasons and how to search for facts.
content
There is a real personal example that adds life to the essay.
Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Historical research
  • Genealogy
  • Architectural styles
  • Heritage
  • Relics
  • Oral history
  • Archival records
  • Museum exhibits
  • Historical societies
  • House tours
  • Renovation projects
  • Original blueprints
  • Careful documentation
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