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Band 6.5

The line graph shows the sales of gold in Dubai for 12 months in 2002 in millions of Dirhams. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph illustrates the sales of gold in Dubai for each month of 2002 in gobs of Dirhams. In general, the trends of
turnover
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 of gold in the entire 2002 were fluctuating. The amounts in March had reached a peak in all periods, but
also
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 had two deepest points in July and September , respectively , despite
recovery
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a recovery
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 in August.
However
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, the amounts had increased slightly and remained steady ultimately from October to December. From January to February, the amounts increased slowly to 230 million. In March, the
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 reached 350
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millions
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million
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, which is the apex for all periods.
Nonetheless
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, the amount dropped continuously to July, which was the first deepest point in
120
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approximately 120
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millions
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million
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approximately
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apply
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. Aftermath, the
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 went up to 210 million in August ,
while
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 it decreased to the same point as July in September.
Nevertheless
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, the
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ascend
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rose
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 to 180
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millions
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million
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 in October and
keep
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remained at
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plateau
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a plateau
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 in November. In December, the
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 had
went
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gone
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 up slowly to roughly 190
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millions
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million
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words turnover, millions with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amounts" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "went up" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slowly" was used 2 times.
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