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Band 3

Some people think that working from home is better for employees than working in an office. Do you agree or disagree?

Some people believe that remote working is far more advantageous than working in traditional
offices
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.
Although
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 working from home is
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time saving
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time-saving
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 for
employees
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.I firmly contend that working in
offices
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 is beneficial as it offers less stressful working environments.
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,it can increase
productivity
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 and promote quality services. One of the substantial advantages of working in traditional environments is that
employees
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 have to
work
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 only in allocated working hours of around 12
a
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hours a
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day.
However
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working
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, working
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 from home means attending online meetings,receiving and responding to
every
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apply
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emails and calls from
work
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 at any
time
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.
This
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 blurs the line of working hours and
lead
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leads
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 to
fraustation
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frustration
.
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, once workers leave
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offices
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offices,
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 they can enjoy their leisure
time
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 with family or invest
them
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it
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into
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in
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 their hobbies. Another critical factor is that it increases
productivity
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 and
foster
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fosters
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 to
deliver
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delivery
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quality of
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of quality
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 services.In
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offices
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offices,
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 people interact face to face ,generate ideas and discuss them without any interruptions.
This
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 helps to develop bonds and energies
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employees
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among employees
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 to
work
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 together.
This
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 results in increased
productivity
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.In terms of quality
services
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services,
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 it can be best illustrated by
medical
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the medical
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 industry.If doctors, nurses were to
work
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remotely
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remotely,
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then
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 it
will
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 fail to deliver effective care to patients.
Likewise
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,other industries will
also
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 suffer from the same problem. In
conclusion
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conclusion,
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 I would state that despite working remotely is
time
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 saving.
Employees
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 can get more benefits
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such
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, such
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 as enjoyable working environments and increased
productivity
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.

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task response
Be clear in your view from the start and restate it at the end.
structure
Use 3 clear paragraphs. Put one main idea in each, with a short support sentence.
coherence
Use simple linking words to show flow, like also, but, however, and then.
grammar
Fix grammar and spelling, e.g. change fraustation to frustration.
content
Give more examples that fit the topic and are easy to understand.
stance
The writer states a clear view and gives reasons.
examples
There are examples of how work is done in office and remote work.
Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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