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Some people believe that studying History is very important. Others say that it is irrelevant and has many limitations and should not be studied at all. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Studying
history
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 is an important subject to study in some
people's thoughts
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people
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,
while
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 others think that it is not useful
to
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for
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 application
it
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apply
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. I believe that studying biography does improve
the
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our
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feedback
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understanding
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 of
our
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apply
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history
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.
Studying
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The study
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record
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records
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shows
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show
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 how our parents and grandparents lived. It is important to learn about our past lives
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also
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, also
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 to compare how easy we are living nowadays than previous. Now, we can see how getting food is manageable. You can easily drive your car to the nearest supermarket and grab whatever you want to eat. In the past, it was challenging to have transport , but these days all kinds of transport are available.
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, if you have to go to your work and you don't have
car
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a car
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, you can use the bus. People who do not
inquiry
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inquire
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biography
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about biography
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 are lake of
responsible
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responsibility
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. They will not feel how
ancestors
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their ancestors
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were living
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lived
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 and how they suffered. More to add, the lake of cultural background is one of the results of not studying
history
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.
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, if your friend from another country visits you and asks you about your culture , but you didn't study
history
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, will you be able to answer him? In my opinion,
history
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 is an important subject to debate without making it complex. Just for others
so
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 that they become familiar with their culture and how the oldest have lived To sum
, some
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up, some
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 believe that studying
history
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 is needed,
while
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 others don't agree with that.
For
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In
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 my own thoughts, I agree with people who think
history
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 is valuable.

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task
Plan your writing. Decide to talk about both views and your own view in a clear order.
coherence
Use only one idea per paragraph and start with a topic sentence.
lexical
Check word choice. Use correct words for ideas like history, culture, and past.
grammar
Use small, simple sentences and fix frequent grammar mistakes to be clear.
strength
The answer shows you know the topic and you give your own view.
strength
There is an intro and a conclusion.
strength
Some ideas show how life changed from past to now.
Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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