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The chart below shows the changes in three different areas of crime in Manchester city centre from 2003 to 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph illustrates changes in the
number
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 of
burglary
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,
car
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theft
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, and robbery incidents in the centre of Manchester between 2003 and 2012.
Overall
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, it is evident that
burglary
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 experienced a significant decline over the
period
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,
car
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theft
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 showed a general upward trend, and robbery remained relatively stable.
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,
burglary
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 was the most common crime between 2003 and 2006,
whereas
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car
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theft
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 became the most prevalent by the end of the
period
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. Looking at the details, there were approximately 3,500
burglary
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cases
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 in 2003, which increased slightly to about 3,750 in 2004.
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,
this
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 figure
then
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 dropped sharply, reaching a low of around 1,000
cases
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 in 2008. In the following years, the
number
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 of burglaries rose moderately and remained relatively stable until 2012. Regarding
car
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theft
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, the
number
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 of
cases
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 was lower than that of
burglary
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 at the beginning. It fluctuated slightly until 2008 and hit its lowest point in 2006, at around 2,000
cases
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. In the subsequent years,
this
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 figure increased steadily to about 2,800
cases
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, making it the most common crime by the end of the
period
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. Robbery started as the least frequent crime, with only about 500
cases
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 in 2003.
This
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number
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 doubled in 2005 but
then
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 fell back to the same level as in 2003. The
number
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 of robberies remained relatively stable throughout the rest of the
period
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, burglary, car, theft, period, cases with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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