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You have recently started work in a new company. Write a letter to an English-speaking friend. In your letter, - Explain why you changed jobs. - Describe your new job. - Tell him / her your other news.

Dear Farhad, I hope you and your family are all doing well. It's been
such
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 a long time since we
last
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 spoke. I'm writing
this
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 letter to share some good news with you. As you know
in
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, in
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Toronto
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Toronto,
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 the prices are so high, and you have to have a well-paid job to afford life. So
last
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 month I decided to quit my job
due to
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 low income, and just started to work in a new company, as a teacher. It's called Newstead Academy, and
it's
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it has
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 been
launched
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launching
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 its activity since 2022.
This
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 Academy is located near my home. It takes only a few minutes
walking
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apply
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to
arrive
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walk
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at
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to
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 my workplace.
Except
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Besides
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 its higher salary, they provide free food and discount
coupon
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coupons
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 to use at some stores and restaurants
which
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, which
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 is perfect.
Also
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, I've met a lot of people at work that some of them
became
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become
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 my intimate friends. Every
Thursday
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Thursday,
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 we have reunions at Paris Cafe. If you are free these
days
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days,
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 please let me know via replying to
this
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 email or calling my number. I'll be glad to see you soon. Best regards, Parimah

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single idea per paragraph
Try to place one main idea in each paragraph and use a clear order: why you changed job, what your new role is, and other news.
greeting and closing
Keep greeting and closing clean and simple (Dear Name, Best regards) and check the comma after Dear and before your name.
coherence
Make the links between ideas smoother by using small words like also, then, but to join ideas.
task response
Add a clear reason for the move and give a small detail about new work; describe duties.
tone
Keep a warm and real tone; avoid too casual talk or slang.
tone
Looks friendly and warm in opening and closing
structure
Clear flow from reason to news
organization
Each new idea starts in a new paragraph
content
Letter suits a friend and is easy to read
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • career opportunities
  • job satisfaction
  • work environment
  • responsibilities
  • role
  • team dynamics
  • company culture
  • professional growth
  • transition
  • colleagues
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