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The table below shows how the UK unemployed spent their time last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table depicts
the
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how the jobless male and female people allocated their
time
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 in
UK
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the UK
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 in the
last
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 year based on morning and
afternoon
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 sections.
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, it can be seen that
women
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 attached utmost importance to doing housework in both sections;
however
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, job hunting and watching TV played a significant role in spending
time
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 for
men
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. In
deteails
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details
, morning
men
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who
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engaged in
houseworks
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housework
 with 19%, but the reverse was true for
afternoon
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men
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,
they
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who
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 spent their
time
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 only with 7%. Job hunting was the
higest
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highest
 section for morning
men
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 with 22%, ın contrast,
afternoon
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men
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's rate decreased by 10 % in
this
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 section and stayed at 12%. Spending
time
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 on
shooping
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shopping
 was very considerable with 20% for morning
men
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. As to
afternoon
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men
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, they placed significance
to
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 watching TV with %
14
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14%
, exceeding that of the other tasks. Spending
time
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 on housework was the lion's share in both durations. Morning
women
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 spent
their almost half
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almost half their
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time
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 on doing chores;
moreover
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, it was the primary section for
afternoon
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women
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 with 21%.
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,
afternoon
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women
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 were spending
equall
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equal
time
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 on shopping and visiting friends at 17%. Sopping
time
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 rose to %26 ;
however
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, spending
time
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 on friends declined by 7% and
reach
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reached
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 10% for morning
women
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words time, afternoon, women, men with synonyms.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • spend
  • spent
  • time
  • last year
  • unemployed
  • most
  • least
  • share
  • percent
  • percentage
  • activity
  • types of activity
  • work
  • job search (if shown)
  • leisure
  • sleep
  • hours
  • overall
  • in general
  • more than
  • less than
  • as well as
  • also
  • but
  • however
  • similarly
  • whereas
  • than
  • equal
  • noted
  • big
  • small
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